Where I Kick Ass and Where I Suck Ass in Writing

I’ve ventured back to Scribophile to get some of them sweet, sweet critiques. And boy, I got critiques. My first chapter of my novel went over so much better this time around (it’s been rewritten) than the first eighteen trillion times I submitted it. Now that it’s not just one big ocean of hatred (I kid –people didn’t hate it that much), I’m able to see where I kick ass and where I suck ass.

So, as a reminder to myself and as a means of getting my readers to think about their own ass kicking and sucking, here’s where I:

Kick Ass

  • Suspense building
  • Character’s inner thoughts
  • Subtle humor

Suck Ass

  • Tense consistency (I’m writing for the first time in the present tense)
  • Some necessary details omitted, some unnecessary details given
  • Repetitive information

I was annoyed to find I didn’t always follow my own advice. My first submitted version was filled with the words “trying to.” Wtf? Like, “I try to will my hands to stop shaking.” Why did I think it was a good idea to even type that sentence –much less leave it after proofreading?

This is why having others read your writing is so important. You might be better than I at catching your own errors when you know them to be errors, but I’m willing to bet there are plenty of people out there like me. People who know what they meant when they wrote it, and therefore have trouble seeing how it sounds to someone reading the story for the first time.

I have edits to make, but overall I’m pleased with my first chapter. The edits are all easy; word choice and the like.

How about you? Where do you excel, and where do you suck? Is there anything you know you need to work on, but don’t know how to begin? If it’s something I know enough about, I might do a blog post on it.

6 thoughts on “Where I Kick Ass and Where I Suck Ass in Writing

  1. We seem to have similar strengths and weakness. My early work I would assume people could see the story because I could see it. I didn’t have it down on paper, but for some crazy reason, I thought people should just know. And don’t feel bad about saying trying to. I grew up where, fixing too, was commonplace, and it’s hard to hear things correctly when you are used to hearing them wrong.

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    1. Haha, thank you! You know, I never thought about it possibly being one of my Southern things, the “trying to.” We say “fixing to,” “liable to,” and “about to” all the time here in NC.

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  2. Strengths: Conciseness (If I feel like it :p), Flow, imagery
    Weaknesses: Grammar (Simple past vs Present perfect), Use ‘That’ too much, Suspense building.
    I don’t have much in way of fiction. However, my blog posts (and even a book review :p ) are narrated as if they are. If get a chance, would love get some feedback from you! 🙂

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